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Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 8 from Taure on May 23, 2008
Hmm...very good, up to your usual good standard of writing. The Harry-Daphne interaction is a bit forced. It's painfully obvious that you're aiming for a Harry/Daphne relationship of some kind in the future. I would suggest increasing the subtlety of their interaction and easing into it a bit slower.
Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 7 from whatareyouevensaying on May 21, 2008
Very good story you've got here, I look forward to reading more.
Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 7 from se7en on May 18, 2008
By far the best Mafia!Harry story I have seen. Update!!!
Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 7 from foolishwandwaver on May 14, 2008
Brilliant story. I have enjoyed what you have written immensly.
Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 7 from Violent Seas on May 13, 2008
Damn, someone beat me to the first review. Love the story. Exceptional characterization of Harry and his thoughts, as well as a great job of developing critical dialogue that moved the plot of the story forward. It was pretty interesting how you decided to have him interpret his dreams - it fits really well with his personality and his lack of knowledge of the situation. Thinking about those dreams, however, left me with one question. Why wouldn't Harry know more about what's going on with Voldemort? You characterize him as a guy who hates dark alleys and mysteries, yet he barely questions anything about Voldemort, choosing to just accept the fact that someone tried to kill him for revenge. While his interpretations of the dreams fit well with his character and present knowledge, I feel that Harry's character in that respect should've been more curious and consequently more knowledgeable. Beyond that point, you've done a really good job with this story. Keep up the good work. -Violent Seas
Review for Cosa Nostra Chapter 7 from aduroconglacio on May 13, 2008
Amazing characterizations and chillingly suspenseful descriptions of Harry's inner thoughts, motives, and plots. Overall a very interesting read. Keep it up.
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