Review for Shadow Warrior Chapter 1 from Archer on April 27, 2011

this is a review only for the first chapter Small thing, Floo Powder doesn't work that way. %u201CI want to go home.%u201D isn't a residence or placename. Something like "The Burrow" or (in Kingsley's case) "Shacklebolt's home" or something similar On a larger scale, the chapter is a cliche in the HP fandom, and while there is slightly more realism in some character personalities than your usual Sirius Black inheritance story, its still a cliche. I'm trying to be constructive in my criticism, and i'll leave you with one peice of advice. think further outside the box, when it comes to storyline. i stopped reading at this chapter, and i felt i had to justify my decision in a review

Author reply
Thank you for the review, and for giving me specific reasons as to why you didn't like it. First off, let me address the floo powder ( I may add this into a later chapter),the phrase 'I want to go home' was a verbal trigger and the actual destination was imbued on the paper. It was a security measure to insure that no-one could have direct access to Moody's home via the floo. Secondly, I know that the general plot/idea, especially Harry getting an inheritance from Sirius, is a bit of a cliche, but so is most HP fanfiction nowadays. I believe that in subsequent chapters I have moved away from some of the cliches and have taken the fic 'further out of the box'. I ask that you at least give chapter two a shot, and if you still don't like it give up on the story. I nearly gave up on the entire Harry Potter series because I had a slight problem getting into the first chapter of the first book.